note for grace.

hey grace,

have tried commenting on your piece and as it won't let me, i'v decided like others to post it here:

wow! great piece of descriptive writing. as i was reading it i felt just like the girl seating two velvet seats away from you.
The only improvements i think you could make is with small things, like making important words/sentences bold and maybe changing the layout slightly.
On first glances, i didn't realise which show you were writing about.BUT maybe you don't need to mention the title of the piece. As its descriptive, do you feel you need to set up it to begin with by mentioning the title? or do you feel the title is irrelevent?
really beautiful piece.well done grace!

hope you get to read this and it helps.

sarah c