Monday, 4 January 2010

draft two of writing piece one: Gepetto's workhop.


“Does he really think that we’re just made of wood?”

Its coming up to Christmas, under your tree there may be lots of presents but there’s something that won’t quite fit under there this year!
“Gepetto’s workshop” takes place at chickenshed theatre this winter. So take shelter from the cold and windy hash-whether outside, and transport you and your child into a magically place where one good little puppet comes to life and wants to save the day.

“Gepetto’s workshop” is adapted from the original story of “Pinocchio” and transformed into a contemporary version, where songs and dances lift you out-of-your-seat and onto the stage.

The story begins, like most, with a bang. SLAM! The door closes after a hurrying Gepetto runs out after a very mischievous and naughty newly-made puppet. A puppet that has come to life! “Pinocchio! Come back here!” But what Gepetto does not realise is that Pinocchio’s 4 sisters also are all very much alive. All have their own stories, except one. Named after the vowels, the last made Pinocchiyoo embarks out on an adventure looking for her own story, meeting friends along the way.


If you’re a teacher in primary school…

From Monday 16th November to Wednesday 23rd December for a sum of £275, treat the lower years of your school no better way then with our show and workshop.

Designed by a small team, “Gepetto’s workshop” is an interactive story which encourages the audience to get up and involved in what’s going on.

Aimed at children up to the age of seven, the dances songs and overall moral is perfect for performing at schools and to be applied into the classroom. Meeting characters, puppets and friends big and small, we promise never a dull moment!

It’s an experience your school will love if you use the mixture of learning, performing and art. We offer an hour session and a half an hour workshop period in which we teach the children songs they will have heard, and take them through activities to do with the shows content. What a reward after a long year!

If you’re a parent…

For six performances only, you are welcomed into the main auditorium at Chickenshed to take part in helping the puppets along on the adventure.

Joining in with songs and dances, meeting some new friends and seeing some old ones, we promise to make your child’s Christmas one they won’t forget!

If you haven’t been to chickenshed before, expect no stage as we encourage children to get as involved in what the performers are doing as much as they want. As well as, puppet interaction, monsters big and small, and a few surprise on the way!

Dates: Saturday 12th December
Saturday 19th December
Wednesday 23rd December.

Times : 10am & 11.30am

Tickets: £5

Book today: Box Office: 020 8292 9222.

Email: bookings@chickenshed.org.uk

Or for textphone users call 18001 020 8292 9222 (Typetalk).

So if you’re looking for magic this year look no further then at gepettos workshop!

4 comments:

  1. thanks for reading my piece ellie!
    i did have a picture in my marketing piece but completely forgot to add it to this second draft so thanks for pointing that out.

    yeah your right i think cahnging some of the colours of text will be more eye catching so i will look into this, i have chopped up the text quite a bit since my first draft but i will also re'look at this.

    thank you ellie

    sarah c

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  2. Sarah
    Like the way you address the audience directly.
    Paula

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  3. Sarah,

    This piece is great. Its imaginative and its inticing. In your first draft though you had some sentances in bold writing? I think that made it more visually appealing to the eye.

    As a reader, I would be excited about the price. £5 is a bargain for children to watch and be apart of an interative show, I would emphasise on the price, so people are more visually aware of it. Perhaps, using a bold font, a larger font or a bold colour might emphasise the price.

    You know your audience well, and appeal to both the teacher and parent. This is a really successful, informative and imaginative piece.
    Great work.
    Klara.

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  4. thank you klara for your feedback!
    i will take your comments on board, i do already have quite abit of information ion bold, but if as a reader you feel i need more i will look into this.

    thank you again, and well done on your pieces really enjoyed reading them.

    sarah c

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